写作技巧第七篇: Task 2

IELTS雅思学术组与一般练习组的写作测验，第二部分都是撰写讨论性的短文。你要提供意见、观点，或是一个问题，然后有组织地陈述支持你观点的因素。你必须要写至少250个字，且最好不要花超过40分钟在这一个部分。短文的题目可以是任何一个普通成人会有的话题，例如:

1. 环境
2. 教育
3. 犯罪
4. 贫穷
5. 医疗健康
6. 网络

在短文里，以段落的方式，你必须要以及连接性的语言呈现出你的意见、理由及真实示例。
这星期，我们要来看看谈关于犯罪与惩罚的短文

第一步: 犯罪与惩罚的字汇

在你阅读示例答案(短文)前，先看看这一些与主题相关的关键字汇及用语。你可以试着连连看，是否可以找到这些字汇的定义。

仔细阅读以下的示例短文。在阅读答案示例前，先把关键字找出来。想想你的论点，以及什么样的例子可以佐证你的想法。示例可以是在台湾或其他地方的例子。

Sample Task

The role of prisons should be to punish criminals, who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayer's money.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Present your ideas and opinions with examples where necessary.

You should write at least 250 words

答案示例

第二步: 在答案示例的文章段落里有一些资讯列于下面的表格中，但是这些资讯的顺序不对。把每个段落看过，然后把段落的字母(A, B, C…) 填进表格的第二栏。先不要管每个段落里的空格。

Model Answer 2

A. _______________, many people would disagree with the idea that prisons should play no educational role at all. It may be true that serious criminals, such as murderers, deserve little sympathy, but that does not mean that people who have committed less serious crimes should be given no help to re-enter society. By giving petty criminals, such as burglars or shoplifters an alternative trade, education programmes can also help to make society safer in the future, as these criminals will not be forced to re-offend to make a living.

B. _______________, many countries offer training and educational courses which provide practical skills, such as plumbing or carpentry. While doing this has clear benefits for the prisoners, who will have new skills when they leave prison, does spending money in this way really benefit society as a whole?

C. _______________, I think that, while it is clear prison does need to deter people from committing crime, in the long run, re-training programmes are better for society as a whole as they help criminals move away from a life of crime.

D. _______________ that offering any kind of training to prisoners is an inappropriate use of public funds. They think that, although training courses benefit the inmate, time spent in prison should be used by prisoners to think about the damage they have done to society. Furthermore, if prisons provide too many benefits, they may be seen as holiday camps, and thus fail to deter people from committing crime.

E. _______________ in favour of education is that using prison simply as a deterrent does not seem to work. It is well known, for example, that the United States has by far the largest number of people behind bars in the world. However, the crime rate in the US remains much higher than in countries, such as Sweden, where the focus is on helping people re-enter society.

第三步:指示性语言

以指示性表达方式来介绍段落是很重要的。这可以让读者知道你论点的方向。以下的字词为上面示例短文的起头 (短文空白处)。连连看哪一个字词该到哪一个段落，然后完成表格里的第三栏。

However
In conclusion
Another argument
Some people believe
Nowadays

答案二

以下是一个比较弱的回答。看过一遍，然后想出五个为什么这个回答得不到高分的理由。

The role of prisons should be to punish criminals, who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayer's money. To what extent I agree or disagree with this statement is to be discussed in this essay.

"Every coin has its two sides". So the wise man says. While there are incontrovertible truths proclaimed by one side on this issue, there are other counter arguments equally valid. To find the truth, we must explore each equally valid statement of belief.

Some people say training courses and education are a waste of money. They say it is useless. It just wastes money. Why should we pay tax, just to waste the money? On the other hand, training courses and education can help people. People can learn many things. Education is the key. Teach the children and let them lead the way, isn't it?

Having looked at both sides, I reaffirm that this is a contentious issue, worthy of more study. Neither side has the upper hand, but equally, neither can be discounted.

第二个答案的问题

第一段是直接把题目抄写下来，所以不会被记分
第二段和结论的部分用了很多与问题无直接相关的记忆性陈述
作者没有给清楚的评论，表示他并不清楚这个测验
这个答案里没有实际的示例 – 作者没有提到在台湾或是世界其他地方有这样的状况
回答太短了

Answers

Task 1: 1. F, 2. B, 3. C, 4. A, 5. G, 6. D, 7. E
Task 2 & 3 (Completed Table)