备考指南-雅思练习教材-写作技巧第2篇

Writing task 2

IELTS雅思高分技巧关于写作技巧的第二部分，需要针对一般性的主题撰写一篇短文来表达你的意见，例如︰教育、环境问题、犯罪、或是全球化现象。

250字
40分钟
必须涵盖︰想法、意见、证据以及示例

这个部分的IELTS雅思高分技巧之写作技巧，着重在以不同的角度去探讨主题，并试着用不同的观点来解释。许多考生在这部分表现不佳的原因是未针对这些主题表达意见。

思维地图

集结思维的技巧之一，是在开始写作前画出思维地图。你需要先针对主题集思广益，然后写下你所想到任何与该主题相关的想法，这个方式将可帮助你脑力激荡。以下是写作第二部分的示例

Dangerous sports such as boxing and sky-diving should be banned.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge and experience.

看看针对这个主题的部分思维地图，你能加入多少想法? (更多的想法，请参考本页页尾)
你不需要把所有的想法都纳入短文中。当你想到一些想法时，选出最有趣的几个，然后针对这几个想法再延伸讨论。
再看看另一个示例问题

International sports events such as the Olympics and the Football World Cup are just an excuse for nationalism and advertising.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge and experience.

试着完成以下的思维地图，尽可能地联想跟这主题有关的事情或想法。

试着集结与以下相关的事情:

国际运动活动的示例
在你的国家一般人对此事的意见
国家主义的示例
商业化和广告的示例
这项竞赛的好处

阅读以下两个示例的答案，记下作者所提到的不同重点。

Answer 1

Nowadays, international sports events are becoming increasingly popular around the world and often have massive global viewing figures. Although many people enjoy these competitions, there are concerns that the events are often over commercialised and are simply a platform for selling things. There are also real concerns that they encourage nationalism, but do these problems outweigh their overall value?

Many people would agree that a lot of events do seem over-commercial, especially when they see the masses of corporate sponsors at such events, which often include seemingly unhealthy brands such as Coca-cola and MacDonald's. They also feel that corporate sponsors force out real fans by buying up all the tickets at very high prices.

It's also true that some events can be very nationalistic. The Chinese government, for example, is trying to use the coming Olympics to demonstrate its progress and power. And in football competitions, there is often the problem of hooliganism, with groups of fans intentionally setting out to fight supporters from other countries.

However, it would be a mistake to overlook the positive sides of such events. For one thing, young people can be very inspired by the positive role models they see, for example the French footballer Zinedine Zidane. And in Taiwan, the national baseball team's success gives people a sense of national pride. These events can also provide a platform for people from all over the world to meet and celebrate something they all enjoy.

In conclusion, I think it would be a shame to do away with international sporting events, as they can inspire people and be very enjoyable. However, it is down to the organisers and governments to curb the uglier side of these events, otherwise they will eventually turn people off them.

290 words

Answer 2

Nowadays, there are many international sports events. But are international sports events such as the Olympics and the Football World Cup just an excuse for nationalism and advertising? In this essay I will discuss the extent to which I agree or disagree.

Many people say international sports events are too commercial. They say that because they are too commercial, they can make many problems. These problems can only be solved when they become less commercial. This is an incontrovertible truth.

People also complain that they are nationalistic. Nationalism generates other problems. This is true all over the world. Nationalism can make people hate the events.

However, are nationalism and commercialisation so bad? Some people say they have some benefits. Without these two things, the events would be very different. People say this would be quite boring.

In conclusion, many events do have nationalism and, furthermore, commercialisation. However, there are advantages and disadvantages to this. The best thing we can do is pursue a middle course.

169 words

第一个答案包括:

公司团体的赞助示例
因此举而产生的问题 – 高票价
两个国家主义的示例 – 北京奥运与足球流氓
年轻人的行为楷模示例 – 席丹
台湾的示例 – 棒球队
针对这些活动提供的三项明确利益
在总结里有明确的意见

虽然文法上没有错误，第二个答案并未包含想法的延伸或是示例，所以这是一个不太好的答案。

Mindmap 1: More ideas